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Task 2 — 大作文

英语第三年 · Third Year in English

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Dana
I've read your practice essay twice, once as your manager and once as an examiner would, and I've made some notes in the margin with a red pen, which I'm told is very old-fashioned. The good news is that your ideas are clear and you've answered the question that was actually asked, which more people fail to do than you'd think. The less good news is that it reads like three separate emails rather than one coherent essay.
你的模拟作文我读了两遍,一遍以你经理的身份,一遍以考官的眼光,我用红笔在页边写了一些批注,有人说这很老派。好消息是,你的观点很清楚,而且你回答的确实是题目问的问题,做不到这一点的人比你想的要多。不太好的消息是,它读起来像三封分开的邮件,而不是一篇连贯的文章。
Li Ming
Three emails is fair, because that's what I write all day, and I can see now that each paragraph starts as if it were the first one. The question asked whether it's better to learn a language by living abroad or at home, and it asked me to discuss both views and give my opinion. Where does it go wrong, exactly?
三封邮件,说得没错,因为我整天写的就是邮件,现在我也看出来了,每一段的开头都像是第一段。题目问的是:学语言是住在国外好还是在本国好,要求我讨论两种观点并给出自己的看法。具体是哪里出了问题?